Dystopian Opening using all of grammar for writing

 

 

Day twenty four and they still haven’t realized that I am a robot. For top of the range company like chroming network, whose facilities are supposed to be the best in the world, this is a dump, a sewer rat heaven. As soon as I get the correct information on the x5 and who ever is behind this I will communicate with my robot general, planet piper will be saved from destruction. Ok, I have to go now I have a meeting with the big boss . I hope they haven’t caught what my true identity really is, fingers crossed, as I stepped into perhaps the worst one of all, I think the most feared thing in this gut rumbling building,was the dreadful smell. I just got back, I have just found out about the x5, its not a thing, its a who!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Above my room, was the bosses room, and inside that room was a crucial piece of writing, that anyone would pay 1 million pounds for, that piece of writing is the fait of planet piper. If Piper was to come to an end, it would have  an enormous effect way beyond our imagination, surely it will. There are to many of them for me to take out by my self we need some reinforcements or something  because we need an army whose strong enough to take out an entire army!!!!!!!!


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2 responses to “Dystopian Opening using all of grammar for writing”

  1. Christopher Waugh Avatar

    This is a very confident piece of writing. I’m very impressed with your use of complex sentences at the start of your piece.

    Try now to add greater atmosphere by building descriptive elements into the existing narrative. You could star by doing this between the part where he leaves and returns – you could describe the environment in great detail at that point.

    I really like the idea of a first person narrative from a robot’s point of view.

    CW

  2. james11 Avatar
    james11

    Thanks sir, I will now go and edit my work

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