It was a bright cold day in april. Winston Smith’s chin nuzzled in an effort to escape the vile wind. Meanwhile slipped through the doors of Victory mansions. Although not quick enough to stop a swirl of dust from entering along with him.
More class work
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James,
You’ve made a good attempt at making the paragraph into simple sentences. You need to test whether what you’ve come up with works, and the best way to do this, is to check that each individual sentence makes sense on its own.
for example:
Does “Meanwhile slipped through the doors of Victory mansions” make sense on its own?
If not, why not? Let me know if you need any personal assistance.
Mr Waugh
React!